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WeWriWa—Ser Folco reacts


Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, weekly Sunday hops where writers share 8–10 sentences from a book or WIP. The rules have now been relaxed to allow a few more sentences if merited, so long as they’re clearly indicated, to avoid the creative punctuation many of us have used to stay within the limit.

I’m sharing from my alternative history, with the working title A Dream of Peacocks. It starts on May Day 1274, when Dante met his great love and muse Beatrice Portinari, and will give them an eventual happy ending, with lots of Sturm und Drang.

This comes a bit after last week’s excerpt, when Beatrice’s father Folco came to the house. Beatrice has been in the house since last night, very ill and injured, and now in a deep sleep. Each successive detail about the situation shocks Ser Folco more and more, and he’s about to learn the most unexpected thing of all.

“Now that I know you’re in complete agreement with me about Simone being cruel and sinful, there’s one more important thing I must tell you. Bice said he beat her because he believes she’s been committing adultery with me.”

Ser Folco jumped up and paced back and forth, his fists clenched and his face white. I sat terror-stricken for those long silent minutes, praying he didn’t believe the accusation. Beatrice’s reputation would be destroyed if this wild story began circulating, and it weren’t as though Fiorenza was known for being a city full of virtuous people.

“I cannot believe I married Bice off to that pearl among men or even considered him as a suitable husband for any of my daughters. Cilia and I didn’t raise adulteresses.” He fixed his gaze upon mine. “I would vouch for your character to anyone. There’s absolutely no proof of such an accusation, and all of Fiorenza would know about it by now if you were having an affair.”

The ten lines here. A few more follow to finish the scene.

The tight, invisible grip on my insides slowly loosened. “You have no idea how relieved I am to hear you don’t believe it. I would swear before Christ I’ve never been alone with Bice since she was married, and when we used to walk alone in your garden as children, nothing inappropriate ever happened.” Given the severity of de Bardi’s accusation, I had no desire to give it any credence by admitting I kissed and caressed her before the wedding. “Anyone who’s seen us interacting or heard us speaking since her marriage knows we behave with the utmost propriety, without a single hint of an illicit relationship.”

“Perhaps Mone made that accusation to cover up his own adultery. People often privately commit sins they loudly preach against and accuse others of. God knows, we live in a very sinful city. It wouldn’t surprise me to learn Mone slept with other women in secret.” Ser Folco began pacing back and forth again. “Mone and I will have many things to talk about when he returns, including annulment. If the law won’t punish him, we will. He can’t behave so inhumanly and slander Bice’s character without any consequences.”

Ser Folco continued ranting against de ’Bardi and cursing his own poor judgment, calling de ’Bardi the foulest, the most insulting words ever hurled at any scoundrel. I nodded my assent to each and every curse. In the middle of his righteous tirade, Francesco, Tana, and Monna Lapa came into the library.


Writer of historical fiction sagas and series, with elements of women's fiction, romance, and Bildungsroman. Born in the wrong generation on several fronts.

5 thoughts on “WeWriWa—Ser Folco reacts

  1. I’m still very worried for Beatrice and the condition she’s in. Their words and decisions cannot heal the wounds already inflicted.

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  2. Thank goodness they don’t believe the lie. And even better, that Beatrice’s father is willing to arrange an annulment for her. She needs the peace of mind now that she won’t be hurt by her husband again. Tweeted.

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