Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, weekly Sunday hops where writers share 8–10 sentences from a book or WIP. The rules have now been relaxed to allow a few more sentences if merited, so long as they’re clearly indicated, to avoid the creative punctuation many of us have used to stay within the limit.

This year’s Halloween-themed excerpts come from the eighth book in my Saga of the Sewards series (formerly known as Max’s House). It needs a great deal of editing, rewriting, and revision, along with a new title, so I’m doing preliminary edits and fleshing it out as I go this month.

The Sewards are now at a costume store, and Mr. Seward, who has very rigid ideas about almost everything, decides for his youngest children, 20-month-old quints, what they’re going to dress as.

“Clown,” Susie said.

“Ghost,” Andrew said.

“Peanut,” Paula said.

“Marshmallow,” Amy said.

“Seal,” Peggy said.

“Oh, no, you five will all be clowns,” Mr. Seward said.

“Clowns scare me, Daddy!” Amy bawled.

“No want face paint!” Peggy wept.

“Itchy pants!” Andrew said.

“Itchy wig!” Paula sobbed.

The ten lines end here. A few more follow to finish the scene.

Mr. Seward found five matching clown outfits in the quints’ size.

“Peanut, peanut!” Paula wept.

Tiffany glared at their father. “Why do you treat them like one person with five bodies? At least your attempt to make them as famous and exploited as the Dionnes didn’t last long.”

Mr. Seward glared right back. “Multiples are supposed to always do everything exactly alike. If quints weren’t so rare, I’d demand they marry another set of quints too. Elaine, would you check the costumes out while I take the younger children to the limo? The other patrons don’t deserve to be subjected to this tantrum.” 

The moment her uncle left the store, Elaine put four of the clown outfits back on the rack. She then got the other four desired costumes.

5 thoughts on “WeWriWa—An unpopular costume choice

  1. Aww, good job, Elaine. I like that she’s getting them the costumes they desire, even though I love clowns. 😀


  2. I confess I often dressed my girls alike, even though they were 18 months apart. But they never had the same Halloween costume. I let them choose every year. I’m glad Elaine is taking care of this problem. Great snippet! Tweeted.


  3. I’m sure my parents, especially my father, would have preferred my sister and I to have dressed like clowns for Halloween, though to my recollection we never did. I do remember one Halloween when I was probably about five, my parents both dressed in elaborate clown costumes when they took us around trick or treating. They had gotten them to use for certain dates for their juggling act, but I think that Halloween was the only time they actually used them.

    Arlee Bird
    Tossing It Out


  4. Good for Elaine! I never had my daughters dress alike (they were several years apart in age) unless they wanted to. One year they both chose the same princess costume, which was amusing to see. Enjoyed the snippet!


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