Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, weekly Sunday hops where writers share 8–10 sentences from a book or WIP. This week’s snippet comes right after last week’s, from Chapter 55, “The Streets of the Future,” of my WIP A Dream Deferred: Lyuba and Ivan at University. This chapter, which closes Part I (to be published as Volume I), is mostly set over Orthodox Christmas 1950.

Twenty-year-old Bogdana Sheltsova, who survived two horrific, life-altering events six weeks apart, is now living with her aunt Fyodora in Ditmas Park, Brooklyn. She didn’t expect her friend Achilles to visit with roses and a necklace after their awkward last encounter in the underground clinic where Achilles assists.

They went to another room to speak privately, and Achilles asked Bogdana to be his girlfriend. As much as Bogdana likes him, she’s still not entirely convinced he could really want someone as supposedly damaged as herself.

Achilles’s first line means “I love you, my beautiful Bogusya, I love you so much” in his native language Slovenian.

“Ljubim te, moja lepa Bogusya, ljubim te močno. There’s been so much love in my heart with nowhere to go since I lost Sabina, and now that I’ve found another sweetheart, I’ll spend the rest of my life showering you with all that love every single second.” Achilles gently strokes her wig. “May I see your real hair? Don’t tell me you’ve kept shaving it like a concentration-camp victim.”

“I would if I could get away with it. It’s still very ugly and unfeminine.”

Achilles kisses each hand in turn. “Don’t tell me you’re so shy about uncovering your hair after I’ve seen and touched the most intimate parts of your body multiple times.”

Bogdana turns bright red.

4 thoughts on “WeWriWa—Slowly but surely

  1. Everyone has a part of themselves they keep hidden from others. Sometimes it’s external, and other times internal.


  2. For some women, their hair is the most important part of their persona they show to the world. She might not have a problem standing naked in front of anyone, but wouldn’t dream of standing fully clothed without her wig. Very moving snippet.


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