WeWriWa—A safe place

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Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, weekly Sunday hops where writers share 8–10 sentences from a book or WIP. This week’s snippet comes right after last week’s, when 17-year-old Adrián and 18-year-old Emánuel were taken up Boubín Mountain to a safe house occupied by their new partisan friends.

Adrián was shot during the escape, though he had enough adrenalin and strength to get to Boubínský Prales and away from his captors. Emánuel has had a very concerning cough since his time in the mining camp Jawischowitz, though he’s managed to contain it to avoid being killed.

This has been slightly modified to fit 10 lines.

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Little house in the Šumava (Bohemian Forest) region of what’s now the Czech Republic, Copyright Chmee2

When the cart stopped, the partisans pulled Adrián and Emánuel out of the hay and hustled them inside, where they were set on two thin pallets under exposed eaves.  These pallets were off in a remote, shadowed corner of the house, near a wood-burning stove.  The shortest partisan pulled up Adrián’s coat and tightly wrapped a thick roll of cotton around his bleeding thigh.  Emánuel buried his face in his sleeve to cough, finally letting loose with all the coughing he’d been suppressing since their escape.  Everyone stood back from him.

“I think he has some lung disease,” Adrián gasped. “We worked in a mine for three months; I was only a coal breaker, but he was an actual miner.”

“Don’t try to talk,” the shortest partisan said. “We’ll get a doctor in the resistance to come by, and he’ll help both of you.  I don’t want to imagine what you must’ve gone through.”

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14 comments on “WeWriWa—A safe place

  1. jakerose says:

    They must be covered in soot and coal from head to toe! They definitely don’t sound like they’re in the best shape after what they went through. Nice piece!

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  2. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    They may have escaped, but it sounds like they still have many battles ahead with illnesses and injuries.

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  3. Escaping seems to have come just in time. I don’t know how long he might last with a lung disease without a doctor.

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  4. I’m glad they’re getting some help but wow, that lung problem sounds really worrisome! As always, you paint the picture so clearly and transport us back in time.

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  5. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    They must both be in bad shape. I sure hope they can be helped.

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  6. P.T. Wyant says:

    Warm and safe with more help on the way. I hope they’ve really made it to safety.

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  7. I can’t imagine either. Glad they got help and hope they get more.

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  8. Some hope for both of them now, though involvement with the partisans might also be dangerous.

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  9. So glad they’re in good hands! Hopefully their hurts can be mended.

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  10. I’m glad they’ve found some refuge.

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  11. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Sounds like they were rescued in the nick of time. It doesn’t sound as thought they could have made it much longer. I hope they truly are safe now. Great scene.

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  12. Ed Hoornaert says:

    I’m glad they’ve stumbled upon people who will help them. They deserve some good fortune.

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  13. I want to believe they’ll have this safety for a long time, but my reader sense is tingling…

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  14. The poor boys. I hope a doctor comes soon. Great snippet.

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