WeWriWa—Where are Emánuel and Adrián?

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Welcome back to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, weekly Sunday hops where writers share 8–10 sentences from a book or WIP. This week’s snippet immediately follows last week’s, which closed with 18-year-old Adalbert asking their friend Emánuel if he has any fancy psychological mumbo-jumbo to explain their situation now and saying he has to crack sometime.

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Memorial to 200 Hungarian victims of a death march, Copyright Haeferl

“Mani’s not here,” Ágoston said. “I say good riddance.  I hope he stays far away from us from now on.”

Kálmán looked around, his heart racing faster and faster as he failed to find Emánuel anywhere.  Adrián had also disappeared.

“Why didn’t you tell us!  We could’ve already buried both of them, and didn’t get a chance to say our goodbyes!”

Adalbert grunted. “I grew to hate both of them.  It’s every man for himself now, and long past the time when we could’ve carried on like normal human beings.”

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13 comments on “WeWriWa—Where are Emánuel and Adrián?

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    This line: “We could’ve already buried both of them, and didn’t get a chance to say our goodbyes!” certainly seems to reflect some ambivalence.

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  2. nancygideon says:

    Survival mode at its most stark and almost inhumane. Well captured, Carrie-Anne.

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  3. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Great insight to those who have adjusted to this terrible form of life and those who are still trying to hang on to what life used to be. I hope freedom comes to those struggling to hang on before they lose that hope.

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  4. Jenna Jaxon says:

    Great contrast in the attitudes of those under gruesome circumstances, which often bring out either the best or worst in people. Why had Aldabert grown to hate them? Well done!

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    • Carrie-Anne says:

      Adalbert grew to hate them because they insisted on staying optimistic, trying to find a way to hide during the various evacuations, and not devolving into a more animalistic state like he and two of their other friends had.

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  5. Wow, this is a powerful snippet, Carrie-Anne. Well done!

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  6. Siren X Star says:

    Great snippet, I had shivers reading it based on the historical content. Love the line: “We could’ve already buried both of them, and didn’t get a chance to say our goodbyes!”, so true and realistic. Again, shivers, for such a dark time.

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  7. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Definitely an emotional snippet.

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  8. Powerful and gritty… nice!

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  9. You do what you have to, in situations like this. First, you have to survive. Then you can worry about the rest.

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  10. So hard to imagine being in their place. I think I’d try to distance myself too.

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  11. Very emotional snippet that made me think.

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  12. P.T. Wyant says:

    I think I see further splintering, Kálmán doesn’t seem to have the same hatred/distaste for them as Adalbert and Ágoston do.

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